tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3878752953637981313.post375520060598425992..comments2023-10-15T03:16:44.927-06:00Comments on Suspense Novelist: The Worst Thing I've Ever WrittenPeg Brantleyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04906858123466177508noreply@blogger.comBlogger9125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3878752953637981313.post-36541603242994219292010-09-27T11:29:28.885-06:002010-09-27T11:29:28.885-06:00Peg, you're so good for me. :-) I went back an...Peg, you're so good for me. :-) I went back and got rid of my beloved modifiers. Kept <i>diaphanous</i> though.<br /><br />Jenny, I leave plot holes too. I make a note when I notice them and keep on writing, or I'd never reach the end of the MS.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09657017791983284991noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3878752953637981313.post-8565599177884066552010-09-25T20:02:47.204-06:002010-09-25T20:02:47.204-06:00Fun post, Peg. Goodness, I wouldn't know where...Fun post, Peg. Goodness, I wouldn't know where to start with my own purple prose. Sometimes I think I channel an overly dramatic Victorian gothic novelist (see :-)). I'm amazed when I look back--it makes me wonder if my orange juice has fermented.Ellis Vidlerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11918353154644739285noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3878752953637981313.post-35650049127845183592010-09-23T20:21:53.230-06:002010-09-23T20:21:53.230-06:00Stan and Jenny, thanks for stopping by and for pos...Stan and Jenny, thanks for stopping by and for posting a comment.<br /><br />I'm coming to you 'live' from Greensboro, North Carolina tonight. Here for the Writer's Police Academy conference. Don't think I'll get much writing done for the next few days, good or bad.<br /><br />And since it took me all day to get here, the 'live' part is really stretching it at this point.<br /><br />Thanks again, you two!Peg Brantleyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04906858123466177508noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3878752953637981313.post-48839272384947550432010-09-23T15:11:23.386-06:002010-09-23T15:11:23.386-06:00I mean, I agree it could use some polishing/re-wor...I mean, I agree it could use some polishing/re-working, but it's far from the worst thing I've seen--and I mean in published books. "Pain casting about" is close to brilliant--it anthropomorphizes (sp?) pain so well.<br /><br />My worsts are not usually the writing itself, but the enormous plot holes I leave behind, or the leaps of assumption I take in terms of characters' motivation.<br /><br />Some of those are pretty cringe-worthy.jenny milchmanhttp://suspenseyourdisbelief.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3878752953637981313.post-54526168866372629662010-09-23T12:21:17.728-06:002010-09-23T12:21:17.728-06:00Take heart! I too am going through a drivel phase...Take heart! I too am going through a drivel phase! But it is so much worse than yours, I am embarrassed to share it. <br /><br />I notice your CR is by Tim Hallinan - he and I and 4 other international writers blog daily at murderiseverywhere.blogspot.com. In today's blog, I mention a way ease the pain of drivel writing!!<br /><br />Always enjoy your blog!<br /><br />StanAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3878752953637981313.post-25744126793388593902010-09-22T21:20:48.850-06:002010-09-22T21:20:48.850-06:00There's an acronym for that, but it escapes me...There's an acronym for that, but it escapes me at the moment. Probably because MY problem is that I under-explain stuff and just think the reader ought to know where I'm going. Poor reader. And, btw, poor husband.<br /><br />Thanks, Karen. And congratulations again.Peg Brantleyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04906858123466177508noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3878752953637981313.post-57710938352628241802010-09-22T20:57:20.684-06:002010-09-22T20:57:20.684-06:00Oh, yeah. *raises hand* Been there, am still there...Oh, yeah. *raises hand* Been there, am still there a lot. :) My weakness? I over-explain stuff. It's like 2x4 writing: bang the reader over the head with a 2x4 enough times and they're sure to get it, right? *cough*<br /><br />Fun post, Peg. <br /><br />Karen DuvallAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3878752953637981313.post-50914732860411925522010-09-22T15:21:39.237-06:002010-09-22T15:21:39.237-06:00I absolutely love the word 'diaphanous'. I...I absolutely love the word 'diaphanous'. It reminds me of gossamer wings. I picture a beautiful dragonfly. Making it into a vessel is just pure magic. So, I vote to keep that somehow.<br /><br />My nails switched to needles. I'm still not sure I'll keep it, but here's the first re-write:<br /><br />Raw emotion filled the air around him with needles. When he finally pulled in a tortuous breath, it felt as if he drug in those needles, their vacated space filled with dense cotton. <br /><br />And of course, now that I'm reading it for public consumption, I can tell it isn't right yet. <br /><br />Ugh.Peg Brantleyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04906858123466177508noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3878752953637981313.post-49380230794558885132010-09-22T15:10:14.232-06:002010-09-22T15:10:14.232-06:00I know I shouldn't love adjectives and adverbs...I know I shouldn't love adjectives and adverbs. But I adore them, especially in a first draft. Knowing that's a weakness of mine, I'm going to share a piece of my wip that's populated with, um, darlings.<br /><br /><i>She manipulated the sheet of parasite-skin fabric. It billowed translucent against the darkening sky, stretching in the center and bowing along the edges until it formed a diaphanous vessel that hovered overhead.</i><br /><br />For the record, I want you to keep the bit about the air being made of nails. In some form, anyway. : )Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09657017791983284991noreply@blogger.com